Wolfman by Tim Hope

In this cartoon, there is a very funny monologue of the main protagonist talking about how he has fallen in love with the moon.

I think it might be a good idea to use a similar monologue to show Kath falling in love with Rick in the Cybernetic Supermarket. This might help the story become less disjointed. It could also help the transition into the bird and fish.

It could go something like this...

"As I listened to his soothing voice I felt I had transgressed all the parameters of my body. I felt expansive, like a huge Ocean. I was aware of all my senses and mesmerised by all the incredible beauty around me... It seemed that he had lifted off the top of my head, like I was a boiled egg. And my yolk burst forth in a bright light reaching towards the heavens.

Ted Talk- Stroke of Insight
Jill Bolte talks about how her experience of a stroke led to the shut down of the left side of her brain.